College Essay Process Paper
Through out the duration of this College essay assignment I have made a number of changes from draft to draft. These changes have primarily consisted of cutting out unnecessary sentences, words, and phrases, re focusing the main topic of my essay on team work and unity, indirectly placing a piece of my self and my personality into the essay as to show the reader who I am.
First and foremost, I have revised the title of my essay. I began with something as simple and forward as “First Performance” and “My first time”. I experimented with something a bit more indirect and lyrical by quoting a musical and titling my third draft “You’ll Never Walk Alone”. But I still felt that this wasn’t fitting into the piece very well, so I eventually settle with a line from a classic American poem “Marching onto fields of glory”. I really think that this title works for the piece because it not only relates to the literal act of marching onto the field and the success that was found there, but also plays into the military/soldier metaphor I was trying to incorporate into the essay. (I also revised and cut down much of the military analogy that I felt was repetitive and useless for the reader).
I am amazed just how much I revised and simplified this piece from the first draft to the final; they are almost totally different pieces. I have really learned a lot about my own personal writing process from this assignment and what I need to work on within my writing. I want to begin writing at a faster pace and writing more efficiently with the time and space given. I want to fight for every word and learn to just naturally write with a proper flow and texture.
I honestly enjoyed this assignment and would not mind more like it. It was nice to be able to see the piece grow from draft to draft and to have peer review along the way. This really kept me on my toes because I had to really work to capture the reader’s attention while simultaneously expressing my views onto them.
First and foremost, I have revised the title of my essay. I began with something as simple and forward as “First Performance” and “My first time”. I experimented with something a bit more indirect and lyrical by quoting a musical and titling my third draft “You’ll Never Walk Alone”. But I still felt that this wasn’t fitting into the piece very well, so I eventually settle with a line from a classic American poem “Marching onto fields of glory”. I really think that this title works for the piece because it not only relates to the literal act of marching onto the field and the success that was found there, but also plays into the military/soldier metaphor I was trying to incorporate into the essay. (I also revised and cut down much of the military analogy that I felt was repetitive and useless for the reader).
I am amazed just how much I revised and simplified this piece from the first draft to the final; they are almost totally different pieces. I have really learned a lot about my own personal writing process from this assignment and what I need to work on within my writing. I want to begin writing at a faster pace and writing more efficiently with the time and space given. I want to fight for every word and learn to just naturally write with a proper flow and texture.
I honestly enjoyed this assignment and would not mind more like it. It was nice to be able to see the piece grow from draft to draft and to have peer review along the way. This really kept me on my toes because I had to really work to capture the reader’s attention while simultaneously expressing my views onto them.
